Consoling Daisy… April 25, 2008
Dew drops
from your petals
tears don’t fall from roses
but should, for their beauty is fraud
maintained by dung, pruning and chemicals
soon faded by sun and greenfly
your purer beauty shines
reflected through
dew drops
Paul Hughes 2008
This rictameter is a little out of the ordinary as far as this blog goes. I’m furiously reading other children’s poems in order to render myself more versatile. I haven’t read a children’s rictameter, yet, but read about the form yesterday and thought I’d give it a try. It’s the kind of thing which seems to fit in a Year 9 English SAT or GCSE anthology. I think the message is straightforward enough. Post a comment if you have any views on its merits. It’s an experiment anyway. Worth a shot!
I think it’s quite a beautiful poem, but have no idea about the rictameter etc. Does that mean you don’t want my comment? xx
Of course I do, Mdl. A rictameter is a poem in which the lines progress from two syllables to ten. It then returns to a final line of two. Both the first line and the last should be the same.
I only read about them yesterday (they were only invented in the 90’s, I read, and so thought I’d give it a go.